Monday, March 7, 2011

Student Slicing

School was busy today. Hectic. I wasn't able to scan the slice of one of my student's, so I took it to type it tonight.

Me and my friend was playing in mud. (I was feeding my horse). I got stuck and I was trying to get my foot out. But I...fell. My jacket was muddy. My foots were muddy. And my sweat pants were muddy.

The reason I feel in love with this slice is that she used a great repeating line at the end...so fun!

2 comments:

elsie said...

I've been trying to teach fifth graders how to use repetition. Sounds so natural in this piece. What a writer you have!

booksavors said...

The repeating line caught my attention as well. I also like the ellipse. It makes me feel like I might be falling.